This is an interesting tale. The characters are authentic and engaging. Their thoughts and feelings make them real. I found myself caring about what happened to them.
The story retained my interest as it progressed. The writing is readable, the vocabulary being varied. The style of expression captures the character perfectly. The author's descriptive ability is evident in the vivid and strong settings evoking mood and atmosphere.
The pace is a little uneven. I would suggest the author read this story out loud or have it read by a friend. This will bring those areas that need work to the author's attention.
This is a good story and with editing and rewriting it will give this jewel the sparkle it deserves.