The Regret Reviews
The plot line was a good, but I think that by making it louder (if you know what I mean) and describe the guilt of shooting and why her parents were there and the emotions she went through when they were shot, when she checked there pulse, if they were dead or not, police sirens, what the place they were in looked like, etc.
Amazing start and I know you can do more to it
Woah, that was quite a roller coaster. The development could use some work- why did they decide to kill people that day? Did something trigger them or lead up to it?- and the conventionals need some work- random capitalizations and spaces. But overall, I did find the end to be surprising, and it was an interesting story. I liked the repeating of "I am Grace. I am 16 years old." However, I do think that it would sound better if the beginning and the end were exact rather than similar with that phrase. Needs some work, but nice job