Accident or Suicide Reviews
oml i love this so much
Awesome best friend..
I appreciated the minimalism and honesty of the topic. I hope you wrote it to 'wrestle your inner demons' or for transparencies sake, as being sick of this life has become pretty common in this new age of emotionally crippled narcissists and online-trolls.
You could decide for more creative figures of speech, but if you feel it is right, as it is, then keep it that way.
Thanks for sharing. Oh, and I could add that 'I burn to ashes' is one option, still I know that 'Ashes' are a sort of trees. So one could burn like a dried ash... ;-)
I like how you formatted the poem, but the words didn't invoke anything for me. I didn't feel anything. Take this line for example:
"I burn like ashes"
What does that even mean? Do ashes burn?
A line like "I often think of death" could be made much more visceral, making the reader feel something rather than just read a simple statement.
please write more poems like this and thank you
i enjoyed it