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Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 2

If you want to be taken seriously - at least, have your work taken seriously - you need to undergo a major attitude adjustment! For a young girl your language is atrocious!! Also, the 'don't give a toss' impression you give out is not exactly endearing.

As regards your story: yes, there are some good elements to it. However the grammar and spelling errors are inexcusable given the facilities on your computer that will highlight them for you IF you bother to use them. Overall, a disappointing effort as, had YOU made the effort to work on it, the story could (and would) have been so much better.

Rich Powell
Rich Powell The author notes? Just noticed that. I've edited to tone it down.
Andy (Formerly Apemann)
Andy (Formerly Apemann) Hi Rich,

Yes, the language was an issue. Unfortunately it undermines my comments. Even so, this young lady still has much to learn...
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