and we met on that cold winter's day Reviews
I think it's great. There are a few things you could work on, but I think that it was amazing! Really brought tears to my eyes and made me stop and think. Thanks for sharing!
There is a good story here fighting to get out. Unfortunately you have burdened it with some clumsy phraseology, poor grammar and spelling. This is a story that needed some judicious editing before it was submitted for publication. Do keep writing, but take more care with the words you use and the way in which you use them. You have talent, but it needs careful honing to bring it to its full potential.