Be Still, Your Beating Heart Reviews
2 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
Your mixture of classic-like phraseology and contemporary modes of speech makes this piece, at times, awkward to read. It feels almost 'jokey' in places, which I'm sure was not what you intended. You do write well, but the inconsistency in your writing 'voice' undermines what you produce.
This IS a good story.
Nathan M Green Thanks for the review Andy. Voice is an aspect I'm always fighting with, especially if I don't write the story in one sitting. I'll certainly try to improve my consistency.
Nice! Reminds me of an X Files episode, but different, nonetheless. I was worried it would be the same, but it wasn't, so I like your originality.
Nathan M Green Thank's Auron. I was an X-Files fan back in the day so I wonder if I tapped into that subconsciously.