Beyond the Darkness Reviews
You story is well told - but your clumsiness with punctuation spoils your work. Take more time and care to CHECK your work before submitting it. I would also advise that you read again our submission guidelines as there are several instances in your story where they have not been followed... You are talented young writer: if you take more care and pay more attention to what you are doing you will be a very good writer one day.
You are indeed wise for your age and that is good. This is something I believed should be shared. Please continue sharing your work.
I would recommend this for any one that has been bullied and they feel like there is no hope but once you stand up and fight back, the bully backs off and no they have hope.