Very well written. I love the idea of the story, and the wording is well placed. Very good story.

For a very well written story, I wonder why the 'I' is repeatedly 'i'..
As a reader, my first reaction was that the spell check is missing and was distracted. But then, does the author use the 'i' instead of 'I' to make some point? I couldn't tell, but would suggest the 'I' in capital letter be used.
Sometimes the finer points can be missed.