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2 reviews have given an average rating of 3.5 out of 5 Stars
apemann
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 3

One of the Golden Rules of writing poetry is that if you have to 'force' a rhyme, then it's not going to work. there are one or two examples in this poem whereby that yardstick is clearly in evidence. Which is a pity, as the poem - overall - is quite good.

Please also remember to NOT use slang or colloquialisms in your work. YOU might know what you mean, but others may not, especially international (or non-English speaking) readers.

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Kaleighishappy
Kat gave a rating of 4

It's great. The ending is fine the way it is, but there are some parts that seem a little choppy or out of place. Doing great!

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