Flash-Fairy Tale - Deviants & Red, Horned Dragons Reviews
Y'all R Not reading the description that says Flashy fiction role play. It's a plot-line brainstorming sheet.
It's an Idea of writing that inspires thought and Is not considered the whole actual story, more like a list of events to play through using text speech, Like the story of the boy who wanted to become a hero.
Sounds like a summary of a much longer story rather than a flash story standing on its own two legs.
The thing that struck me most about this piece was the number of times you mention 'Deviancy RT' (seven). There are other ways of saying the same thing without actually saying EXACTLY the same thing.
Overall, though, the story was far too condensed and maybe a little too rushed to really work as well as you probably hoped. It needs much fleshing-out and reconsidering if you plan to add to it at a later stage.
I learned to separate criticism, especially constructive one, from condemning, hostility, and disrespect.
I do not think that submission is above individuality, and I disliked that 'critique', hence I articulated my point of view.
I apologize for calling it racist. Did you notice that plenty of readers have chosen to stay absent from me and my critics alike? I don't need to wonder what makes them prefer other sites...
Please don't feel obliged to waste any more time on my works. They will always be below your own, high standards.