Getaway Reviews
4 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
I liked the twist but I disliked the use of the adverb in "yells loudly". How do you yell "silently"?
Pretty good, but I propose use of the ';' in the beginning. What should've taken it's place was the '-', which would signal that the narrator was adding on a peice of information.
Nice work!
Andy (Formerly Apemann) The semi-colon is the CORRECT punctuation as it indicates exactly what you suggest the hyphen does...
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it was good!
I think many nine-to-fivers can relate.
Andy (Formerly Apemann) ... and the self-employed! :-)
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Edited and corrected.