nicely woven ink number two repetitive wording would need a change takes away from the piece but over all good Haikus
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Andy (Formerly Apemann) How would you express the same thing without using the same word? At least offer a credible alternative...
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PoeticT [wiggling toes do entertain] for the 7 syllable part hope this helps
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Andy (Formerly Apemann) That completely changes the mood and theme of the piece, which is why I chose to sue 'chubby'. Please, do not offer criticism or advice unless you actually have something sensible to contribute. You clearly mis-read the whole mood of the poem. If you were a parent of a baby child you'd immediately grasp the poem's intention and not offered your silly comments!!
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PoeticT im a father of three and I could have just attained to say the set out was wrong but I offered constructive criticism on one part.
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Andy (Formerly Apemann) No, you didn't like the repetition of ONE word, which was perfectly justified in the context and theme of the poem. Constructive criticism is when you offer a comment that does NOT undermine the whole piece!
Had I taken your so-called advice on board I would have ended-up with an entirely different poem. Thank you for your contribution, but it was neither helpful nor, to be frank, welcome.
Had I taken your so-called advice on board I would have ended-up with an entirely different poem. Thank you for your contribution, but it was neither helpful nor, to be frank, welcome.