I go through this a lot.This poem/story is very good way to let all of that anger out. But remember you must be proud of who you are. You must take pride in your success and acknowledge your failures. Stay positive and keep on writing stories.

There's a very fine line between love and hatred. I hope you have found or will find how to cross that line peacefully and love yourself in the end. Hatred is a very powerful emotion. Be careful.

For the story: it is great! Not much else to say there
For your issue if it still is a thing: Why do you hate yourself? I won't tell you think happy you've tried but attempt to find the source. It sorta seems like it comes from comparing your self to others. Regardless great story!

This is is what runs through my head everyday, but surround yourself with things you love. It will help, think positive, I know it’s hard, I experience it too. I know you wrote this a long time ago, so I hope you feel better, if not I sincerely hope you do.. I love your writing, please continue.

This is really nice, And i know how you feel. I have been diagnossed with depression, so that may be your problem. I know how hard it is to love yourself, but try.