This is a hard one to review. On the one hand your writing is eloquent and engaging. On the other, though, I am left questioning the actual POINT of your story?

Your story doesn't appear to have any point or purpose, which is what has left me somewhat baffled. To write something for the sake of it is a waste of time (and talent!), which is what it feels like you have done here.

I look forward to reading more from you, and hopefully understanding it, too :-)