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IanG
IanG gave a rating of 3

Try writing 'he was proud that I'd been promoted to Principle' or something like that. Her partner already knows she's been promoted and where she works, he probably wouldn't state the obvious. In films and T.V. characters sometimes spell out what they must already know, for the viewer's benefit. In a story you don't need to, you can say that with an inner monologue or, in a first person narration, narrator addressing reader directly.

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C Alexis
C Alexis LanG I am so grateful for your kindness in providing this feedback. I will reciprocate. Be well.
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