Nice story. In very few words a lot of emotions and thoughts have been conveyed. Well written.

This is an awesome little vignette. What I liked about it was the level of emotions you managed to pack into short space.

Think about two things when you write short fiction like this:

* Dialogue punctuation.
* What POV are you writing from?

THIS is my kind of writing!

I love the way you get straight into the heart of the story, your characters coming to life through their words and actions. It's not over-embellished or described or padded-out with superfluous prose.

In my opinion, your story ends just where it needs to end: without a resolution or any answers. You leave those questions for your reader to figure out. THAT is good story-telling.

Without doubt, your best piece so far. Congratulations.