Life Lost in a Commute Reviews
One thing, the ending was a little confusing. Was the narrator playing the guitar or the version of himself playing the guitar?
It encaptured me like light (it would make sense if you knew me)! I hope I get to hear more!
I loved this. The beginning in particular reminded me of The Catcher in the Rye. The way you developed the character throughout the story was magnificent, and also, I think this is a real thing which people can easily connect with!
Extremely good work... However, I would like to point out two areas for you to improve:
- The character acted a little too sentimental considering his previous thoughts.