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Life Lost in a Commute Reviews

2 reviews have given an average rating of 4.5 out of 5 Stars
Kat gave a rating of 5

Wow! Great!
One thing, the ending was a little confusing. Was the narrator playing the guitar or the version of himself playing the guitar?
It encaptured me like light (it would make sense if you knew me)! I hope I get to hear more!

Nathan M Green
Nathan M Green Thank you :)

I would say it's down to your own interpretation. I like to think of him as an extension of his subconsciousness.
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Daniel_Cann gave a rating of 4

Ohh, excellent!
I loved this. The beginning in particular reminded me of The Catcher in the Rye. The way you developed the character throughout the story was magnificent, and also, I think this is a real thing which people can easily connect with!
Extremely good work... However, I would like to point out two areas for you to improve:
- Imagery.
- The character acted a little too sentimental considering his previous thoughts.

Nathan M Green
Nathan M Green Thanks Daniel, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Two very good points, thank you for the feedback.
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