Friend me Folfy!!!! And great working Kallie

Oh I've totally just experienced this

So0o0o0oOo0oo, I liked it. It's a good work, it could just use some fine tuning. I'm not trying to be rude, I just wanna help. I think that you did a cool thing with the last 2-3 lines. The last two with their rhyme hit pretty hard and worked really well, but it didn't mesh very well with the top portion. I feel like if you make that top part rhyming, or even just close-ish then it could do a lot better. Maybe try doing some flow exercises too. Either way, it's a good piece, and you're well on your way. Safe travels! Stay optimistic!