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Love Sucks? Reviews

2 reviews have given an average rating of 3.5 out of 5 Stars
neehu
neehu gave a rating of 4

covers the true meaning of love.....but maybe you can make the dialogues shorter add some actions by the character that reflect what their feelings try those out and your story will get into a good shape

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apemann
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 3

Not too bad, although I would have liked a bit more to-and-fro dialogue between to the two characters. The very long 'speech' in the third paragraph sounds a little evangelical; 'preachy', even. If it had been broken-up with a couple of interjections from the other person it would have smoothed the edges a little without diluting your message (which is well put!)

A good effort. Well done! :-)

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