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MERIDA and the SHAPE-SHIFTER Reviews

IanG
IanG gave a rating of 3

You wrote a tense buildup as she tried and failed to kill him. I wondered how she was going to get out of it.

'More thoroughly' didn't feel right in that context. 'More forcefully' or 'more severely' would've conveyed Mum's determination better. I hope this proves helpful.

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