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MURDER for FUN Reviews

2 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
Karly-North
Karly-North gave a rating of 5

greastest story ever! Love the plot twist at the end!!!

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apemann
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 3

What began as an interesting idea did not really fulfil its potential. Your style of writing in places is very stilted and awkward; old-fashioned, even. At times it reads almost as jokey; facetious even, which robs your words of the impact they were meant to convey. The overall feeling I get from your story is a level of uncertainty as to which direction you meant it to take: a serious dramatic story or one that is a little light-hearted. This story is a little of both at times.

All that being said, there is a good story-teller in you. I hope to read more from you.

One note of caution: it is NOT good practice to use numerals in prose. One should always write numbers in full.

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stanley  wilkin
stanley wilkin Give you that. Unfortunately I posted the wrong version. It certainly is facetious, as I do not believe it warrents complete seriousness.
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stanley  wilkin
stanley wilkin I was going to let this lie, as I mistakenly posted a draft instead of the completed story. Nevertheless, let me make a number of points concerning Mr Apemann's remarks.
Every one of these sites has someone who decides they are an authority on writing, no matter their own output. Mr Apemann believes my sentences are stilted and awkward (it is a draft) and not apparently 'modern' like his own wishy-washy efforts. Me Apemann, having apparently won a modest prize for one of his less-than-vigorou
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stanley  wilkin
stanley wilkin efforts knows all about writing! He chastises my facetious tone, but Thackery-Joyce-Woolf-wrote enormous tomes in likewise fashion. Mr Apemann is an authority, writing pleasant stories without an edge-on failed relationships without additional levels or much insight. Mr Apemann is an authority!
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