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SHADOW BEINGS Reviews

lemonslice
lemonslice gave a rating of 2

I like how you come straight into the story and use short sentences to ramp up the tension. Some parts could be cut though, no need to state that the protagonist didn't take a shower. Also, make sure you stay in the same tense throughout the story; you have a tendency of switching between past and present tense.

Good luck with your writing!

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