She Was Everything Reviews
2 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
Contrary to what Andy is saying, this spoke to me, was very satisfying. Why? Because I can relate very well. Though I do agree this may have been better as a poem, the content within the story is very relatable and touching. Especially the part where she says, I feel everything...
This feels incomplete. There is something here, for sure, but in its present form whatever 'it' is isn't there yet. You have aimed for an air of mystery but have ended-up with something that is neither mysterious or satisfying. If anything, it's frustrating :-)
Not your best effort; however the language, imagery and wording is very good. I wonder if this might perhaps have worked better as a poem..?
TheForgotten Yes, I see what you mean. I may try to convert it into a poem or turn it into a story. Thank you for the feedback
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