She Wolf Reviews
Yes it is a very good story or rather a skeleton of a very good story. Dear author, I try writing short stories too (in Russian). I would like to translate this story to Russian with some modifications perhaps.
This was a good idea that you did not really explore to its full potential. As good as this story is as it stands, with a little more thought and consideration it could have been so much better. Fleshing-out your characters and the drama of what had happened to them to bring them to the situation you describe would give your little tale more impact.
I hope you will write more stories for us to read in future :-)