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2 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
hercules
hercules gave a rating of 5

I really loved your story. Well done.

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Alaaddin
Alaaddin Thanks
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IanG
IanG gave a rating of 3

Ahmed could ask who took his blanket. He need not be annoyed but only curious. If someone else was cold in the night it would be natural to ask who that was, if not in anger then with concern.

If he confronts an obstical or two when fleeing the ghost it raises the tension. If his horse stumbles or slips that would add to the excitement. You could have them recover quickly and race on. If he panics and so gets lost while escaping, again there's more tension. His friends could come and find him.

Keep practising at your writing.

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Alaaddin
Alaaddin thank you for your feedback, by the way, I would like to know what should I improve in my writing?
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IanG
IanG You could've made more of your protagonists dash home after seeing the ghost. I think he would be in a hurry, scared, confused or all three.
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