The Lyonette Reviews
3 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
You've got some good stuff there, but I think your poor grammar and punctuation lets your story down. It also takes too long until anything significant happens.
michaelvincent Hi @ lemonslice thanks for taking the time to review my story. Your input was really helpful and it made me make necessary corrections. It would be great if you have the time to go through it again. Thanks!
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Great job! But when do you tie it back together with the dream? How did the little boy become a dream-wandering person?
michaelvincent Hello @ Kat, thank you so much for taking the time to read through the story and for your kind review. I have done a little more work on the story and will be glad if you can find the time to go through it once more. Thanks so much!
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Really well written! Would love to see a part 2 of this someday
michaelvincent Hi @ sorrynotsorry. Thanks for your kind review, and i sure am glad you enjoyed the story. There may not be a part 2 to the story, but i sort of edited the end to make the story feel more complete. It would be great if you can find the time to read it again. Thanks a lot!
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