Would've been nice if you expanded more on what a "Guardian" was and the ending would've been a bit better if you also explained why the company spreading through out the whole country was such a bad thing that happened. The theme is suppose to be sad and serious so for that scene that included the woman being apprehended you could've added some extensions like the woman was trying to protect her child or something and a scene of the woman and the main character having some interaction and the woman helps him out which would've made some connections between them so that it further explains why the main character felt bad for the woman and rushed in to help, like that woman was the only person that has truly treated him like a human and not a worker, and that the rest of his family neglected him or something.