This story has all the elements of an interesting tale. However, it appears more of an outline than a finished story. Misspelled words and lack of punctuation substantiate that conclusion.

I would highly recommend that the author of this piece read it aloud or have it read to them in order to obtain an overall idea of what needs to be done to bring this tale up to a readable level it so richly deserves.

The author has a talent for story telling and should exercise that talent in order to develop it to its fullest capabilities.

Ciao
JT