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IanG
IanG gave a rating of 4

She tried to break the silence. But it did not.
If she's spoken she's broken the silence. Try "she tried to get through to me, but she couldn't " or "she tried to elicit a response from me, but couldn't."

The rest of it is excellent, atmpspheric, plausible with a touch of mystery.

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