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It's okay, but I'm with Apemann on this one. Needs work on punctuation. Excessive commas and fullstops, too. Also, try using a line down (shift + enter) instead of paragraphing each line.
This was good... until the punctuation error on the third-last line marred it... ('im' for I'm)
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