War of the Ages Reviews
There were a couple of if's amid a few sentences like when the protagonist introduces his name. I think the story's details are over-explained. Other I think the plot is kinda good but needs more working on it.

Savage3footer Thank you i understand what you mean i will try to do better :)
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sricham You can check out the 2 stories I wrote and see what you think of them.
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