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2 reviews have given an average rating of 3 out of 5 Stars
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 2

"The way your smile can protrude any boulder."

Up to this line your poem was quite entertaining and interesting. This line, though, kills it completely. It's meaningless and silly...

An 'unwritten rule' of writing, especially poetry, is that if you have to 'force' the line to come, it probably isn't going to work. This appears to be the case here. However, the rest of the poem works well, which saves it from being a disaster :-)

Kat I agree and disagree with Apemann. I think you could have made it rhyme better by saying something like "all life's boulders," but either way it was great!!
🌸Fate gave a rating of 4

Rhythmic and sweet. I do like it.


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