United Kingdom • 65 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Accurately captures the nature of girl bullies and the depth with which it cuts.
I liked the twist but I disliked the use of the adverb in "yells loudly". How do you yell "silently"?
Wow! Great! If it were a little longer it would've felt more complete, but the irony and complications of the situations made it worth it.
Loved it!
One suggestion - the 'pain' and 'again' rhyme really killed the rhythm of the poem. It made my brain stop to look over the stanza instead of praise the work itself.
Besides that, I believe you are doing great!
Pretty good, but I propose use of the ';' in the beginning. What should've taken it's place was the '-', which would signal that the narrator was adding on a peice of information.
Nice work!
it was good!
I think many nine-to-fivers can relate.
I found this very amusing and true. There are some things people say that can get on your nerves to the point of snapping them. Take "getting on my nerves" for instance. I use it, but not as constantly as some of my friends might. Wanting to snap someone's neck for the incorrect grammar and usage of wording is something that most writers share. 😜 -KP