United Kingdom • 65 y/o • MaleReviews Received
With all my heart I loathe people that do it to others like that. It is just so.... ugh. Anyways like the way you came about with this. It is excellent put out and on point.
I can really relate to this poem. I really like the poem wording, but overall I just love this poem!
There are many poems about time but yours was rhymic and worded just right. Again another wonderful piece you offered to us.
Truly enjoy the structer and rythem of the poem. Can feel the tone, takes me to a place we have all experienced. You grasped that moment beautifully.
I love micro fiction because of stories like this one. The first line sounds very differently when read a second time. :)
Keep up the writing!
I think many nine-to-fivers can relate.
Excellent!
Indeed, it can be observed that the greatest of men treat the physically disabled/challenged harshly. The entire society views them as useless brats born to die without honour.
This piece of writing briefly describes this bitter and cruel truth in elegant words.
But, there are some mistakes present in the writing.
"...as painful and anything inflicted by a real weapon."
In many instances, you forget the Oxford Comma.
It may not, as you say, be your best, but it is the truth behind the words of this story that struck me. A reader can't ask for any more than that.
I'm 78 and deal with this uncompromising urge to write every day. The worst is when the dreaded 'writer's block' prevails. The minutes, and hours, and days drag on and on.
And then, suddenly, I'm writing again and once again there aren't enough hours in the day or days in the week.
I give this five stars for heeding the prodding to get it down on paper. I think of how many jewels are lost because writers do nothing because they don't think it's good enough. I say poppycock - write! and then write some more.
Ciao,
JT