United Kingdom • 65 y/o • MaleReviews Received
This story is so stupid. It has no meaning whatsoever, and is just completely not a use of writing. Go waste ur time on something more valuable!
abusive. total reality. this story can make someone puke. I read the whole story'
and I would have placed a character in place of general. I chose to read the
story to myself. Others would want to believe reality of truth
Even though the story was somewhat sad, it was still okay
I liked the twist but I disliked the use of the adverb in "yells loudly". How do you yell "silently"?
the title the end all just falls in place.Maybe you can add a bit more description...maybe he can go through what happened during the day and the suspense can be that hes the one who is going to die.Just a random though that i got after reading the story .....:) but overall it was good
A couple of dialogue punctuation errors, but otherwise a pretty funny tale. Reminiscent of Monty Python delight.
