United Kingdom • 65 y/o • MaleReviews Received
I usually don't read things along these lines but the story was well written and left suspense at every corner. The ending was quite unsatisfying; but I believe you did that for a reason. Good job.
I found this very amusing and true. There are some things people say that can get on your nerves to the point of snapping them. Take "getting on my nerves" for instance. I use it, but not as constantly as some of my friends might. Wanting to snap someone's neck for the incorrect grammar and usage of wording is something that most writers share. 😜 -KP
I think many nine-to-fivers can relate.
it was good!
Pretty good, but I propose use of the ';' in the beginning. What should've taken it's place was the '-', which would signal that the narrator was adding on a peice of information.
Nice work!
Loved it!
One suggestion - the 'pain' and 'again' rhyme really killed the rhythm of the poem. It made my brain stop to look over the stanza instead of praise the work itself.
Besides that, I believe you are doing great!
