Andy (Formerly Apemann)

A very creditable first effort in the micro-fiction genre.

Be wary of being 'too clever', though: why you could not have used the word 'shirt' instead of 'maillot' is beyond me... Remember, you want to engage your readers, not alienate them :-)

Overall, a good start. Well done!

Well here's one day when you can feel very much accepted. :-) Good poem.

So much said in so few words. I like this - a lot!

Sweet and touching. Lovely!

I'm not sure why you chose to present your work in such a form as it was unnecessary (and a little confusing, to be honest)

Overall the poem is good, if a little overlong and slightly repetitive in places. A like your imagination and your use of words. You clearly take a great deal of care over your work and choose your words carefully. There are some who could learn a thing or two from you :-)

Well done and keep writing. It's a pleasure to read your work.

A surprisingly poignant and hard-hitting story which is well told. A very good job overall. Sure, there are one or two minor errors in spelling and grammar, but nothing that seriously detracts from the story. Well done!

Simple, heartfelt and so typically you!

Nice one, hon...

I quite enjoyed the style of your writing. It's innovative and interesting, in spite of the bleak subject matter. I have to admit to being somewhat baffled by your 'author's note' comment... Overall, a commendable effort.