Canada • 61 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
You worded this so beautifully! Jerry's frustration LEAPS out of the text as well in her words and mannerisms.
A well written piece with a touch of mystery about the heroine.
I like the metephores of the heron and the airport terminal.
You do a good job of evoking the forest and the cycle of decay and renewal.
Try writing 'he was proud that I'd been promoted to Principle' or something like that. Her partner already knows she's been promoted and where she works, he probably wouldn't state the obvious. In films and T.V. characters sometimes spell out what they must already know, for the viewer's benefit. In a story you don't need to, you can say that with an inner monologue or, in a first person narration, narrator addressing reader directly.