Canada • 30 y/oReviews Received
Wow! This is great, I love this a lot! Write more poems, you have he talent in you.
-Auron
This story is good, however it is almost exactly like one I wrote before this...
This is a good-ish poem. My issue with it is that the overuse of the "If I had known" line somewhat detracts from the overall poem. I think you could have said as much - and as effectively - if you'd presented your poem in two or three stanzas with the hook line at the beginning of each stanza.
I look forward to reading more from you :-)