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I'd have written "there was no escape as the sharks were gaining on him." Please take that as constructive critcism as the basic plot is a good one. Animal lovers will like it.

This is fine descriptive writing and a good coming of age piece. I hope you keep writing like this.

This is a fine story, You describe the setting and build suspense very well. You also bring in a big contemporary issue, the lithium mining or potential for it.

This is a good story with a moving ending. I could imagine myself there.

I sincerety hope things get better for you soom Scorp. The word weept should be wept but that's a minor issue. I think you're showing courage and resiliance but I wish yoi didn't have to.

This is an atmospheric, imaginative piece. You make good use of other senses besides sight. Keep it up.

A lot of young people will relate to this. Its quite usual to break up with someone while in your teens. The trouble is, if its your first break up you've nothing to compare it with and no experience of getting over it. Give yourself time to reflect and recover. It won't seem like it now, but there's time to move on and meet someone else.

As in earlier stories about this gang, you evoke a more innocent time very well.