United Kingdom • 61 y/oReviews Given
Not many people have always had a perfect life. What we see on TV and social media is often highly selective, leaving the bad bits out. There's no one mould that everyone has to fit. Barring an unforseen calamity, you should have plenty of time to shape and enjoy the next stages of your life. We can't change the past but we can learn from it.
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I'd have put 'barked viciously' rather than 'viciously barked.' The relationship between husband and wife is plausible and the twist is good.
As usual you write vivid descriptions, and the central character's decline is renfered convincingly.
As before, you evoke the setting beautifully. I like the metaphore of the worne globe
This is a moving story and beautifully told. I could believe in all three protagonists human and canine.
You have summed up a common dilemma very well.
If the witch encounters an obsticle on the way to the cave it racks up the tension. An evil wizard might be guarded by a monster of some sort. The witch could defend herself with a powerful spell, or maybe make herself invisible until past the danger
Please take this as a constructive critique
I like the ryme and the rytham of this piece. I'm a prose writer rather than a poet but it reads good to me.