IanG

I'd have written "there was no escape as the sharks were gaining on him." Please take that as constructive critcism as the basic plot is a good one. Animal lovers will like it.

"Where the wild flowers end seems like an original way of saying this is where the sea begins ot where land ends

The dialogue is amusing but convincing. Well done

The central characters are well drawn and I like the twist at the end. I'm not sure how plausible it is, never mind it made me laugh and clearly it was meant to.

I like your descriptions, they are so vivid I can imagine that I'm there. When it comes to the plot,I'm coming in part way through but it reads promising from here.

You describe the setting well, despite the brevity of it. It left me wanting to know mote then agaim perhaps its good to make us use our imaginstions.

I like the ryme and the rytham of this piece. I'm a prose writer rather than a poet but it reads good to me.

As before, you evoke the setting beautifully. I like the metaphore of the worne globe