IanG

The central characters are well drawn and I like the twist at the end. I'm not sure how plausible it is, never mind it made me laugh and clearly it was meant to.

I like your descriptions, they are so vivid I can imagine that I'm there. When it comes to the plot,I'm coming in part way through but it reads promising from here.

You describe the setting well, despite the brevity of it. It left me wanting to know mote then agaim perhaps its good to make us use our imaginstions.

I like the ryme and the rytham of this piece. I'm a prose writer rather than a poet but it reads good to me.

As before, you evoke the setting beautifully. I like the metaphore of the worne globe

I'd have put 'barked viciously' rather than 'viciously barked.' The relationship between husband and wife is plausible and the twist is good.

Not many people have always had a perfect life. What we see on TV and social media is often highly selective, leaving the bad bits out. There's no one mould that everyone has to fit. Barring an unforseen calamity, you should have plenty of time to shape and enjoy the next stages of your life. We can't change the past but we can learn from it.

I hope this helps.

A well written and only too plausible story. We all need support from time to time but we don't always get it.