Australia • 69 y/oReviews Received
Happy that I did not stumble into another copycat of ``The Midnight Meat Train´´, a horror movie unable to deliver true Lovecraftian horror, this story was authentic horror and also showed-off a comediant streak.
``MacAdams did a weekly self defence course that equally mixed military unarmed combat. back alley dirty fighting and Three Stooges mayhem.´´
The fun of ``Ha, Ha! I am not that easily undone, dear Satanists´´ is humbled by the final. That is a good sign for concept of a story, and it comes in both, homage of the horror classics AND fitting the stand-alone story.
JPYoung is an author, who does not make the mistakes of dishing us ill-formatted texts, nor prone to severe mistakes wrecking the grammar. Inspiring!
As in earlier stories about this gang, you evoke a more innocent time very well.
"Where the wild flowers end seems like an original way of saying this is where the sea begins ot where land ends
I like the comparison of the ringmaster to a potato. You evoke a different, I think more innocent time very well. The attempted robbey came up ratber suddenly, its as well to foreshadow these tbings. Then again it would be sudden for them. Overall, well done.
I'd have put 'barked viciously' rather than 'viciously barked.' The relationship between husband and wife is plausible and the twist is good.
You evoke the setting very well, especially the swim on the summers day.