Kat

Wow. I almost fell over. That was great!! Please do write more like this!!

Loved it!
One suggestion - the 'pain' and 'again' rhyme really killed the rhythm of the poem. It made my brain stop to look over the stanza instead of praise the work itself.
Besides that, I believe you are doing great!

Pretty good, but I propose use of the ';' in the beginning. What should've taken it's place was the '-', which would signal that the narrator was adding on a peice of information.
Nice work!

I agree with your response to Appeman. Sometimes critism can take a sharp turn, stab you in the back, and leave you bleeding inside.
Besides a few grammar errors, it's great! I wanna hear a ton more from this! It's a great start! Please, please, please continue!!!!
-KP

Great, but the while clothes and knee-highs were a little confusing. Was Karen'a clothes not exceptable? Was it a uniform? Had Karen soilded her pants?
Sounds awesome! Hope you continue!
-KP

Holy crud. That was hallarious and just downright awkward at the same time. Love it.

Wow.
That was great.
You should be a comedian.

So cute!!!!