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I really enjoyed your story. Well done.
I really enjoyed your story. Well done
WOW! I love your story. Well done.
It was tense and convincing.
Just one thing, in Britain the lifeboat would turn out even in a storm. Perhaps its different in Florida on account of storms being more intense, but in Britain people sometimes think they wouldn't launch a lifeboat in a storm, and they do. Even professionals don't always find casualties on dark nights, but they try.
Well written, informative, inspiring and gripping!
I loved your story. Well done.
If Cal tries to stand up to his mother but she won't stop objecting, that would be more plausible than if he gives in immediately. It creates a bit more tension too.
Credit where its due, you've improved the story since you put an earlier version of it online.
A moody, evocative, well-written supernatural tale.