United States • 59 y/oReviews Received
A moody, evocative, well-written supernatural tale.
If Cal tries to stand up to his mother but she won't stop objecting, that would be more plausible than if he gives in immediately. It creates a bit more tension too.
Credit where its due, you've improved the story since you put an earlier version of it online.
I loved your story. Well done.
Well written, informative, inspiring and gripping!
It was tense and convincing.
Just one thing, in Britain the lifeboat would turn out even in a storm. Perhaps its different in Florida on account of storms being more intense, but in Britain people sometimes think they wouldn't launch a lifeboat in a storm, and they do. Even professionals don't always find casualties on dark nights, but they try.
WOW! I love your story. Well done.