Magiclife4455

Frankly, this is awful: NO proper paragraphing; NO proper dialogue; NO proper sentences; NO plot that makes much sense, to be frank.

I make no apologies for being so frank. To be otherwise to be to do you a disservice. This piece needs a LOT of work to bring it to an acceptable standard, which is why, I'm afraid, I am returning it to you.

Please rework it and resubmit.