melissak

Honestly, I struggle with names all the time. I always search up: Random guy (or girl) names. That way it's easier. I only do it when I draw a blank on names though

It seems like she's more worried about fashion and herself than the boy, who is yet to be named. She seems to be moving too fast into acceptance then she would be in real life. I would think she's still in shock and less worried about her wardrobe. It's a good book though and I hope you continue. Seems like somethings missing though, something crucial, but I can't put my finger on it.

Sir Ayren seems like one of those people I read in mangas who are crooks. I'm not sure if he just seems that way or if he's actually a crook. I'm very interested in the boy with green eyes. I can already imagine the boy without a description. Also, did you mean: "a white woman with sleeves" instead of "a with woman with sleeves"

I'm so intrigued to read more about Lu. I would've put more description into the hideout where she saw the stares personally, but that's just how I am. I already have an idea of there looks besides the boy without green eyes and Henna. It's so interesting

I love this book!!! I wanna read more! Silver has a weary vibe to her and makes me question a few things. I'm curious about what she means by voices and why Sir Ayren is being super nice to her. I imagine him looking really scary, but if that's the case why does he speak so sincerely? I understand the shock that Lu can read and I'm shocked shes not hypnotize by the green eyes again. Poor girl has to deal with Fin haunting her though. Something bigs going to happen though and Fin has something to do with it. The only trusted person in that house seems to be Ren and Lu, but thats just how I see it. This book has my imagination going wild.

I like it! You like writing these according to your other submissions, and I honestly enjoy reading them. There sometimes sad, but inspirational too.

Sounds good so far, but this was very strange. I already guessed about her being important, but I'm confused on the voices. They like Lu and Blue (it rhymes) and shes the key to Ren. It may just be my head wanting a romance, but I'm begining to think those two have a little something for each other. I'm probably wrong though. She's a strong girl who zones out a lot and I'm curious on what the true motives of those voices are. It's quite strange. I wanna read more and finish this mystery!!

I like it