United States • 25 y/o • MaleReviews Received
I really liked the description and the structure, but sometimes the story was hard to follow. I had to read the story three times and to use Google Translate in order to find out who is in the coffin: the daughter of the main character. I got mixed up in paragraph 6 that the main character's sister was in the coffin, too. However, the deep emotional experience of the main character was described so vivid that I recalled the death of my family. All in all, the story was okay. To improve it furthermore, I recommend the author to give a general description or a general narration of the situation which the main character is facing.
If someone else can follow the story like a flowing water, then it is because I am a beginner in English, sorry.
This is a moving poem with a lot of good imagery. If its written from experience I hope things get better for yoi soon. Good times don't last forever but niether do bad times.
