Jane Bean

I enjoyed this story, its plausible, timely and full of vivid descriptions.

You have clearly worked hard on this story, researching the background, researching your protagonist and building a sense of place. I hope it proves popular.

You start out subtle and end it shockingly. This is a very good piece with convincing detail delivered with economy.

I like your style, you describe things with detail and imagination.

I like this story, you've created a plausible scenario and described it with wit and vivid detail.